The popularity of mobile phones among young people is a growing rapidly. Is it a good or a bad development? Give your own opinion and relevant examples from experience.
The last decade have seen enormous changes in the way people's lives are affected by cell phones. In the past, people had some problem with communication with other. The most signification problem was people were not reachable at every place and every time. They had to send several mails, or telegram or leave several messages. This problem today is solved by invention mobile phone.
A mobile phone is a device while can make and receive telephone call, text message. Also you can take several pictures or capture videos. These days most people use smart phones and they do some important task with it. For example, they can use Wi-Fi on the phone and search on the internet, or they can schedule their appointments or read a book or listening to music and so on.
On the other hand, there are some beds affected of using of cell phone that need our concerning. This affected have seen most on the teenagers. Unfortunately, teenagers use cell phone most of the time so they do not do their routine duty. For example, they play on the phone and forgot to do their homework. Also, mobile causes they have not good nutrition. The worst thing about using mobile phone is Bluetooth. Unfortunately, we see people Bluetooth private information or sometimes send virus or even hack other mobile. A common example for this issue is celebrity private life.
To sum up, I believe every invention is not good but we can use good invention in the bad ways. We should better education people to use new inventions. Mobile phone undoubtedly make are live more easily than the past. We just need some good guides to use it.
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Sentence: This problem today is solved by invention mobile phone.
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Sentence: Mobile phone undoubtedly make are live more easily than the past.
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