You are hereIn some countries the average weight of people is increasing their level of fitness is decreasing .What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing their level of fitness is decreasing .What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them


sandeep pooni's picture

By sandeep pooni - Posted on 27 June 2012

Essay topic: 

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing their level of fitness is decreasing .What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them

Nowadays, there is no doubt that people are fatty and less healthy as compared to past. There are three reasons of it – junk food, a disease and laziness and business. This essay will discuss these causes and give solution of this obstacle.

First one, fast food is play an important role to make a person heavy because it has calories and oil only, and no protein, which increase the obesity in a human. For example, many people in USA are the prone of burger, pizza and so on. Some time, unfortunately, some kind of disease makes a person obese but average of this person is low in world.Third reason, laziness is the immense cause of it .Some people become so idle that for small – small work, they used technology. For instance, in past if a person had to travel for 1 kilometer then mostly the preferred to walk. But now for just half kilometer, persons used motorbikes, cars and so on. Some people are become fatty as they have no time for workout due to shortage of time.

The problem of overweight could be easily reduced by making and following some rules like f controlling eating habits such as reduced use of fast food and always eat home cooked meal as it is more hygienic, decreasing dependency over technology such as use stirs instead of elevator and doing some kind of exercise.

In sum up, obesity can be effortlessly controlled. It depends upon the willpower of person. For example, An Indian singer who was first overweight is now a fit man.

Average: 7 (22 votes)
Tags
More essays by this user:
Looking for speaking partner/tutor/chat? Join the instant conversation now!
    
Something about you
Choose a nickname and enter at least one ID (Skype, MSN, QQ, ICQ or Yahoo) if you want to be listed!
Registered users only
Loading...
(149 users watching; 1 users on the list)
People online
Nickname Sex L Country Favorite topics Contact

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Mubasysyarah Ma...
Wild animals have no place in the 21st century and trying to reserve these animals is a waste of resources. To what extant do you agree or disagree? saeed_S_1368
Today more people are travelling than ever beforeWhy is this the case?What are benefits of travelling for the travelers? sankalp_bhambri
Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve traffic and pollution problems.To what extend do you agree or disagree? Pravallika32
Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Muh Asrih Achie
The chart below shows the estimated sales nationally of silver goods in ‘000s of units for two companies next year. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in silver goods at the end of next year.Write a report for a university Dilbar
In many countries school-age children are spending their free time in doing homework. Is it a good or bad thing? What is your own opinion? Give examples to support your view. marzieh
People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest? monday1692 sticky icon
In recent years, some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the countryside.This situation might bring some problems for the country as a whole.What are these panji
Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that circumstances of an individual crime, and motivation for commiting, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. zha

Term
Write complaint letter to the airline manager regarding the behavior of one of staff members on your flight. In your letter- Give full details of your flight.- Say what the problem with the staff member was.- What would you like the manager to do regardin marzieh IELTS
GENERAL TRAINING WRITING TASK 1You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this.Write a letter to your manager. In your letter-Explain why you want to take time off work-Give details of the amount sliwer IELTS
Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of travelling to a workplace every day.Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh the disadvantages? fialka IELTS
The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparisons where relevant. Kal-El IELTS Writing Task I
Writing task I (General)You were hurt in a minus accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket.Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter :* Say who you are.* Give details about the accident.* Suggest how TEST-English School IELTS
Some people say that the Olympic games don’t have a role to play in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion. Justin IELTS Writing Task II
Some people say that the Olympic games don’t have a role to play in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion. tsushama IELTS Writing Task II
Some people say language courses using the internet and allowing you to talk to somebody is a good way to learn. Others, however, believe that study in classrooms is still the best way of learning. Give your opinion on these views and include your own exp lrana32 IELTS Writing Task II
Climate change is now an accepted threat to our planet, but there is not enough political action to control excessive consumerism and pollution. Do you agree? nguyenkhaccuong IELTS Writing Task II
Topic: Happiness is considered very important in life? Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? pateltejas IELTS

Term
Some people say that the Olympic games don’t have a role to play in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion. Justin IELTS Writing Task II
Individuals can do nothing to change society. Any new developments can only be brought about by governments and large institutions. How far do you agree or disagree? byeonhosa sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Climate change is now an accepted threat to our planet, but there is not enough political action to control excessive consumerism and pollution. Do you agree? nguyenkhaccuong IELTS Writing Task II
Some people say language courses using the internet and allowing you to talk to somebody is a good way to learn. Others, however, believe that study in classrooms is still the best way of learning. Give your opinion on these views and include your own exp drjowelynt sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education.The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.Write a report for a university lecturer,descr drjowelynt IELTS Writing Task I
Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside. lrana32 sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Some people say language courses using the internet and allowing you to talk to somebody is a good way to learn. Others, however, believe that study in classrooms is still the best way of learning. Give your opinion on these views and include your own exp lrana32 IELTS Writing Task II
Crime is a big problem in the world; many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion. lrana32 sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Climate change is now an accepted threat to our planet, But there is not enough political action to control excessive consumerism and pollution. Do you agree? WEBSTER_KAMPUNG... IELTS Writing Task II
Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane, you left a bag. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel.Write a letter to the airline. Explain ●what has happened,●describe the bag and its contents a Hiten sticky icon IELTS Writing Task I

Many people spend a lot of time using communication technology. What are the reasons for this? What is the impact on the relationships with their families and other people? Justin sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane, you left a bag. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel.Write a letter to the airline. Explain ●what has happened,●describe the bag and its contents a Hiten sticky icon IELTS Writing Task I
Individuals can do nothing to change society. Any new developments can only be brought about by governments and large institutions. How far do you agree or disagree? byeonhosa sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Lots of people copy the famous people they see on TV. Why do they do this? Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people? Hiten sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Some people believe that vegetarian diet is the best diet for a variety of reasons, but others strongly oppose this view. Discuss both views and give your opinion. lrana32 sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside. lrana32 sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Crime is a big problem in the world; many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion. lrana32 sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Some people say language courses using the internet and allowing you to talk to somebody is a good way to learn. Others, however, believe that study in classrooms is still the best way of learning. Give your opinion on these views and include your own exp drjowelynt sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
The pie chart show the percentage of person arrested in the five year period ending 1994 and the bar graph shows the most recent reasons for arrest. Sabee IELTS Writing Task I
Some people say that the Olympic games don’t have a role to play in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion. Justin IELTS Writing Task II
essayE-rater's picture

Sentence: First one, fast food is play an important role to make a person heavy because it has calories and oil only, and no protein, which increase the obesity in a human.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to is and play

flaws:
No. of Words: 262 350
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.019 0.07

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 262 350
No. of Characters: 1162 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.023 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.435 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.345 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 75 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 51 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.154 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.329 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.3 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.539 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.019 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5

sandeep pooni's picture

I am very thankful of you for this.
What improvements are needed to make this of score 6.5 or 7?
Please tell me

You are improved already!

To get more score, the first step is trying to put more words (around 350) for the essay. Your first paragraph and second paragraph are ok. The third and forth paragraph need more words. or you may need to write 5 paragraphs .

Then let's see what is the next step.