Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money other disagree and think that a good salary leads to better life. Discuss both these view and give your opinion
It is undeniable that get a lot of money is not anything, the important get convertible job. However some people believe more wage can give good future. I will give opinion about this case.
On the one side, having more money is very important to survive in this world. I incline to believe that money can give comfortable to owner. For example, I can buy a lot of commodity when I have money, I can go to anywhere, anytime with five star facilities, because I have money. Basically main purpose someone to work is for getting good future, and one of the way, how to get good future is having high wage. Good salary can motivate worker to make sprit when they working, but cannot be denied high salary identical with big pleasure, and more responsibility. This will make unenjoyable job.
One the other side, getting enjoyable job can make worker more comfortable. I believe people can get more spirit when they pleasant with their job. I would argue that when people working, money is not only as one of their purpose but also they have to enjoyed situation in office to increase their performance. According to psychological employee can more productive when they get good situation, and they work with their heart, it mean, they enjoyed with their job. From my point of perspective, working is process to get better life in the future, so employee should give more attention to find enjoyed job.
Briefly, getting good salary is very important, because salary has strong connection with better life in the future, but get enjoyable job, can make increase employee performance. I think people should find appropriate job with their passion, because they can get money and enjoyed job also.
It is undeniable that get a lot of money is not anything, the important get convertible job.
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Sentence: I incline to believe that money can give comfortable to owner.
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Sentence: I believe people can get more spirit when they pleasant with their job.
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Sentence: I would argue that when people working, money is not only as one of their purpose but also they have to enjoyed situation in office to increase their performance.
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Suggestion: Refer to to and enjoyed
Sentence: According to psychological employee can more productive when they get good situation, and they work with their heart, it mean, they enjoyed with their job.
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Sentence: Good salary can motivate worker to make sprit when they working, but cannot be denied high salary identical with big pleasure, and more responsibility.
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Sentence: This will make unenjoyable job.
Error: unenjoyable Suggestion: enjoyable
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