Some people believe that children's leisure activity must be educational otherwise they are a complete waste of time.Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from experience.

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Some people believe that children's leisure activity must be educational otherwise they are a complete waste of time.Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from experience.

In my country, many activities are done by people like sports,indoor and outdoor games and co-curricular activity which relate to the educational or other organization. Many people think that children have to play educational activity in a leisure time however others are view that educational activity does not more important than other activity. In this essay, I shall discuss both side of the argument and give my opinion.

Most parent's and teacher's opinion that children should spend their leisure time in only educational activities as they believe this activity help children to develop their mind and to secure their future. I think that it is very good for their career.

However, it is important that children also spend their spare times in activities those are non educational such as sports and other extra co-curricular activity. First, In this activity children develop not only physical health but also to develop certain qualities like team work and co-ordination. second the children come out from the educational work although they also know about the society and environmental in addition to improve their inter personal relation which are very important at a present time so it is very helpful to the children.

It is certainly true that at a present time parents have to know about the benefit of the both activity therefore they develop their children physical and mental health to make their social group and also know about the environment problem as they have to become a guide for their children.

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Sentence: Many people think that children have to play educational activity in a leisure time however others are view that educational activity does not more important than other activity.
Suggestion: others are in the view that educational activity is not more...

Sentence: However, it is important that children also spend their spare times in activities those are non educational such as sports and other extra co-curricular activity.
Suggestion: However, it is important that children also spend their spare times in activities which are non educational such as sports and other extra co-curricular activity.

Sentence: Second the children come out from the educational work although they also know about the society and environmental in addition to improve their inter personal relation which are very important at a present time so it is very helpful to the children.
Suggestion: Second the children come out from the educational work although they also know about the society and environmental in addition to improve their inter personal relation which is very important at a present time so it is very helpful to the children.

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Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
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No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
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No. of Different Words: 124 200
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No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.551 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
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Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.711 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5