Some people believe that personal happiness is directly related to economic success, others believe that there are other factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that personal happiness is directly related to economic success, others believe that there are other factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is true that people accept about personal happiness which is directly related to economic achievement. However, I believe same with others say that there are other factors which could be influencing happiness are past life experience and personal value.

Now days, individual happiness is often correlated with economical aspect and it illustrates human in terms either rich or poor. Rich men are assumed as people who can produce a lot of money although they are just sitting in their own homes. Good economic status is an ability to fulfil the complementary necessities after getting the basic needs which people can afford for new model cars, branded outfits and branded gadgets. On contrast, poor people are correlated with suffering for house, food and job. This explanation indicates people will be happy if they are facilitated in their life. Other fact shows there are some different factors in making happy such as past life experience and personal value that dramatically people never concern about it.

The first, past life experience means the memorable activity which people did in the previous period. The beautiful memory can stimulates people for doing repetition action when they faced the same condition and they expected the same result as successful as before. They always keep in mind the impressive experience for healing hurt in the present life. Sometimes, it becomes a simple way for people who try to synthesize happiness.

Another reason is personal value which is determined as the way people assess themselves and occur rarely implementation in people’s life. The result from comparing between expectation and real condition influences the personal value. People who identified as happy person force their real life as their expectation even can be better with getting suitable expectation of others because in reality people need proof from other which indicates their respect.

In conclusion, it is clear to me about mostly people say that personal happiness is about economic success, while I believe that there are other factors which can influence the happiness and commonly it is unrealized by people.

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Now days,
Nowadays,

which could be influencing happiness are past life experience and personal value.
Description: two verbs in one sentence.

after getting the basic needs which people can afford for new model cars,
after getting the basic needs by which people can afford for new model cars,

Sentence: The beautiful memory can stimulates people for doing repetition action when they faced the same condition and they expected the same result as successful as before.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to can and stimulates

people need proof from other which indicates their respect.
people need proof from others which indicate their respect.

it is clear to me about mostly people say that
it is clear to me that most people say that

Sentence: Good economic status is an ability to fulfil the complementary necessities after getting the basic needs which people can afford for new model cars, branded outfits and branded gadgets.
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