Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

In this century, some people spend their time with same activities. The feel more convenient than do other activities. However, other people believe in different activities more interesting. Here, I would give some views about that problem.

First of all, there are some reasons why people prefer doing common activities. Some people think that focus on regular schedules could bring more benefits for them. Similarly, they avoid toward new agenda because merely confiscate many time to learn about it. For illustrate, it is true that all people have own characteristic. Mostly, individual has favorite activity or hobby, and people claim that doing regular activity could make them become more competence. As a result, they could reach their dream through interesting activities such as become sports athletes.

On the other hand, some opposite views show that doing different activities could receive more experience. They dwell on alteration activities are needed for human. Moreover, most of them have interesting personality because they can make a friend with many people. For instance, students who follow extracurricular have many experience stories than their friends who are simply learn about lessons at school.

In my point of view, some other activities might be needed by students because it could create people who have more knowledge and experience. They also should focus on target to reach their purposes. As a result, they could make some progresses because they do some different activities seriously.

To conclude, people who are devote their time, energy, and thought to explore their hobby might bring some benefits for them. Again, other activities give essential influences because every people are unique and they need to try another activity for elaborating themselves.

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Sentence Length SD: 4.78 7.5

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To me, there are several plural nouns that left vague ideas. I think you’d add some adjectives to limit your thought.

Hey, does this sentence raise any serious problem ? : The feel more convenient than do other activities.