Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, a lot of people who live in Modern city have many activities to get a better life. However, some people do not change their life, the other people believe that changing their life to be good is the best choice.
on the one hand, people who do not change their lives want to do the same things to spend their lives. For example, people who live in the jungle of Papua, they prefer to do the same activity everyday, like hunting an animal for eating with traditional gun, do not take a clean their self with soap because they believe soap is not good for water in river. They also not use technology such as telephone, internet and television in their life. For transportation, they just use animal or walk by themselves because the believe that modern to responsibility to take care their natural in around of them.
On the others hand, a lot of people want to change their life and void change because they think change is better thing for themselves. For example Jakarta's people, who live in modern city, they life with different wishes, they always work everyday to get some change in their live. Their style always change to be same in their society, like use high gadget, wear good fashion everyday, have a sport cars, or the others good thing. The better liver, if they could be changed their life day by day to be good in their environment. Thing is about materialistic, sometime they do not think about effect of their activity which could destroy nature resource. When they always build, they not plant much trees, it could decrease production of O2 and make air pollution.
In summary, I think the good thing is change to be a better life without forgetting about keep nature of Earth.
Sentence: For transportation, they just use animal or walk by themselves because the believe that modern to responsibility to take care their natural in around of them.
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Sentence: On the others hand, a lot of people want to change their life and void change because they think change is better thing for themselves.
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Sentence: For example Jakarta's people, who live in modern city, they life with different wishes, they always work everyday to get some change in their live.
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Suggestion: Refer to they and life
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