Some people think that government should provide assistance to all kind of artist (e.g. painters, musicians, poets), while some others think it is a waste of money. What is your opinion?

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Some people think that government should provide assistance to all kind of artist (e.g. painters, musicians, poets), while some others think it is a waste of money. What is your opinion?

It is true that government should give supply and accommodate like assistance or guide for artist to support their skills. On the other hands people have argue that it only spend much countries money and is not important things for government to give provide assistance. Below, I will explain the reasons.

Some people believe that government should give provide assistance to support their activity. Artist needs guide to control their activity because the activity totally busy. Assistance not only finding a consumer to consumption their art or ability but also can be helping artist to get a new job. Assistance only need little time to make them become famous, because usually assistance can promotion their ability or art and publish in societies.

However, part of people think that it only spend much ‘countries’ money and is not important things for government because they have responsibility. Government have to use the ‘countries’ money for important things such as help poorer economy, education, or repair the infrastructure like road. Artists can also independent to make themselves become famous because sometimes they have friends who become popular before them. They can ask their friends to help them become popular.

In conclusion, both of them that can give advantage nor disadvantage. I believe that government should be keep the ‘countries’ money for important things because it can help a lot of people to be better country like prosperity than provide assistance for artist who want to be popular.

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Sentence: Assistance not only finding a consumer to consumption their art or ability but also can be helping artist to get a new job.
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Sentence: Assistance only need little time to make them become famous, because usually assistance can promotion their ability or art and publish in societies.
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Suggestion: Refer to can and promotion

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