Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become move useful adults.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become move useful adults.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In the over 10 years, teaching method in growing which appears new teaching method based on technology and lifestyle. Homeschooling is the new teaching method which grows to help students who prefer to study at home. Most of the popular students who are artist or famous people who have busy schedule. The main reason why people choose homeschooling, because they have limited time. Some people argue that it reduces sense of competition of children, because children do not have rival when they study and they cannot compare they ability with other people. However, regular school develops children how to compete with other student. As a result, children have more sense of competition and it will useful for future. This essay examines two opinions of sense of competition in children.

Many parents prefer to educate their children by homeschooling. Because, they believe that it more exclusive to improve children intelligent, but in the other side it decreases social skill of children and also reduce sense of competition in children. As a result, children’s psychologies cannot grow well and cannot prepare to compete with other people who has experience haw to face in competition.

However, the best way to be a leader in the future is learning how to encourage children who have experience to compete. Regular school provides an environment for student increase their sense of competition. As a result, who has graduated from regular school more ready to compete when they are adults than children took homeschooling.

According to a research, homeschooling is the best teaching method to improve individual ability, but it cannot improve social ability. Because homeschooling teaches students in the comfortable zone. However, students from regular school has ability to compete not only in the comfort zone, but also ready to compete in the other situation. Because of that they have s sense of competition since they studied in school.

In conclusion, sense of competition is the important things to improve children’s physiologies. Most of people become a leader who studied how to compete with other people. As a result, parents play an important role to develop sense of competition of children.

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In the over 10 years, teaching method in growing which appears new teaching method based on technology and lifestyle.
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Sentence: Some people argue that it reduces sense of competition of children, because children do not have rival when they study and they cannot compare they ability with other people.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to they and ability

Sentence: As a result, children have more sense of competition and it will useful for future.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to will and useful

Regular school provides an environment for student increase their sense of competition.
Regular school provides an environment for student to increase their sense of competition.

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