Some people think that the sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss

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Some people think that the sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss

Human’s personality is formed during childhood development. During this period, children learn basic skills that they will use later in their life. Competition and collaboration are two substantial skills that will be needed in different human’s sphere so as to succeed in every environment. Whether competing or coordinating in a group is the topic of my discussion.

On one hand, every person should have the ability of competing in various situations. In school those children who have the sense of competition would be able to become the top student and even succeed in getting scholarship to attend college. Thus individual’s accomplishments during their education and career would be the result of developing the competition skill during their childhood. Nonetheless, they possibly struggle when it comes to situations requiring collaboration.

On the other hand, some approaches require cooperating between group members in order to handle the specific task. For example, during higher education career, students should have the ability of collaborating in an organized group to handle a project. The better one can cooperate with his/her partners, the higher chance he/she might have to succeed in his/her field. However, if children are taught just to cooperate in any environment, they may be pushed back by their competitors or even being overused.

Overall, Psychologically, children are at the most important stage of their life span. Individual accomplishments go back to what they had been taught and what skills they had learnt during their childhood. Therefore, children should be persuaded to develop both skills of competing and cooperating in order to use each of them at the right situation.

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