Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, the world of sports is an opportunity to sack million-dollars in a pocket. Sports professionals are able to reach more money than other professions such as doctors, soldiers and teachers. It becomes controversial news that some opinions say that the athletes are suitable to earn a colossal amount of money, however, plenty of opposites argue that it is not right.
The first viewers believe that profession in an academic sector is that providing some knowledge is teachers, who teach teenagers to become successful people, have a good turn on social service and a country in future more. General practitioners effort to save citizens life and have responsibility when they operate the patients who get sick are in a clutch. Doctors hold life-sustaining principal on the operation system until they bring to life the patients or not, which will go awry. Superheros in the first line in a war have a big requirement to deal with their duties to solve and to protect our country from colonizes. All professions were mentioned, it has contributions in the world and struggle to build advancement and prosperity country although their salary is not more than the athletes.
On the other hand, professional fee in sports area is applicable expenses because the athletes put up a good fight to reach good position in their career. Most barriers always come to drag feet to reach popularity such as injuries, sexual gossips and competitors. For example, Cristiano Ronaldo who is famous football player playing in Real Madrid gets an issue that he is dishonest with Nicole Minetti who is beautiful model from Italy has promise to meet with him in luxurious hotel in Spain. It makes Ronaldo's wife jealous, and Ronaldo is going to be exclusion which can influence his popularity to decline. Accordingly,the athletes have to go through high pressure from their career. Besides, the important things are that the athletes show extremely skill when they perform in a competition like World Cup for football players and Olympic to gymnasts. It will encourage their popularity, and perhaps some sponsors are going to take contract to them if they indicate satisfactory performance such as win in the competition. Moreover, some athletes will keep fighting till the end to support and to represent their countries to get trophies, and they will receive money and honor.
In conclusion, it seems to me that professionals sports have different income with other jobs. My opinion is that it is not about between salary and profession, but it respects of all professions show their ability and responsibility for their job descriptions have advantages for societies or not.
Comments
If I use two commas, is it
If I use two commas, is it true or false?
The first viewers believe that profession in an academic sector is that providing some knowledge is teachers, who teach teenagers to become successful people, have a good turn on social service and a country in future more.
No difference to put commas,
No difference to put commas, it is still one sentence.
You need to analyze the structure of the sentence, for example:
I believe that my home town is the best city in the world.
subject: I
verb: believe
object which is a clause: that my home town is the best city in the world.
In the clause, you need to have a complete sentence again:
subject: my home town
verb: is
object:the best city
figure out where is subject,verb and object in a sentence, then you will understand the issues in your sentences.
Sentence: The first viewers believe that profession in an academic sector is that providing some knowledge is teachers who teach teenagers to become successful people have a good turn on social service and a country in future more.
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Sentence: Besides, the important things is that the athletes show extremely skill when they perform in a competition like World Cup for football players and Olympic to gymnasts.
Description: The fragment the important things is not usually followed by is
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace is with are
Sentence: In conclusion, it is seems to me that professionals sports have different income with other jobs.
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Suggestion: Refer to is and seems
Sentence: It makes Ronaldo's wife jealous, and Ronaldo is going to be extrusion which can influence his popularity to decline.
Error: extrusion Suggestion: exclusion
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Need to develop sentences smoothly.
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