The table and chart give the results of surveys in Australia about the use of internet. The table provides information on the reasons for use. The chart shows use in relation age.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
There are a table and a chart which show the information of surveys about internet use in which is Australia. The surveys study of particularly, who uses the internet and what it is used for. There are five activities and seven age groups.
Based on the chart, teenagers who were 14-17-year-olds, reached the higest percentage, then the 20-29 age group had 99 per cent. Moreover, ninety eight per cent of the 18-19 age group was more higher amount than two age groups which were the 30-39 age group and 40-49 age group. Both groups had defferences amount about 1%. However, an average of 89 per cent of Australians use the internet.
According to the table, there were the popular activities which were bill transaction and internet banking activity, at 63 and 62 per cent. Ordering goods and services were the third reason which was doing by users and hold 57%. The next reason why the internet was used was for doing phone calls and ten per cent was for writing blogs.
Overall, most of all age groups use the internet when they do some activities, although the old people are rarely to use the internet. However, the internet is used by people for doing financial activities which are popular activities based on the surveys.
Sentence: There are a table and a chart which show the information of surveys about internet use in which is Australia.
Description: The fragment a table and is not usually preceded by are
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is
Sentence: The surveys study of particularly, who uses the internet and what it is used for.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to surveys and study
Sentence: According to the table, there were the popular activities which were bill transaction and internet banking activity, at 63 and 62 per cent. Ordering goods and services were the third reason which was doing by users and hold 57.
Description: A verb 'to be', past tense, 2nd person singular or all is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to were and bill
Sentence: Overall, most of all age groups use the internet when they do some activities, although the old people are rarely to use the internet.
Description: The fragment are rarely to is rare
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 10
No. of Words: 215 200
No. of Characters: 986 1000
No. of Different Words: 109 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.829 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.586 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.303 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 55 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 41 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 29 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 16 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.878 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.424 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.647 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4