Television is dangerous because it destroys family life and any sense of community; instead of visiting people or talking with our family we jus watch television. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It is true that may be television is harmful for some people while other people believe any benefits can be gotten through watch television. They have their own reason to say why television is dangerous or not.
Several advantages is given by the people who agree that television is not danger. By watching television some people can get newest news about what happen at that time. Without much effort, just watching, television will give update news and any information. For those children who are in development term such as elementary school manage to read quickly the subtitle for example.
In contrast, some people say that it can be harmful to watch television. It can be understood because because there are some reasons to support that. Firstly, watching television can make somebody forgets about the circumstance. It makes person does not aware what time it is or does not realize that someone is calling. Secondly, television also break family life and any sense of community. For example, watching television would like to be chosen than go to relative's house to greet. The communication each part of family is unintensively because any distraction by watching television.
To sum up, statement that ruin family life and any sense of community are caused by television that make it danger is debatable. Television has advantages and disadvantages so people just need to take the benefits and avoid the bad effects.
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Sentence: For example, watching television would like to be chosen than go to relative's house to greet.
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