Television is dangerous because it destroys family life and any sense of community; instead of visiting people or talking with our family we just watch television.

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Television is dangerous because it destroys family life and any sense of community; instead of visiting people or talking with our family we just watch television.

Sometimes, television able to destroy family life and any sense of community, it is dangerous. It is true that television cause conflict. While I accept that crime would be possibly occured, I believe that instead of visiting people or talking with our family we just watch television, it seems that television make people can stay in touch each other.

Rumors that television changes family life and community into danger state are real. A good family ought to be bad condition is affected by TV show such as sports, movies and crimes news. For example, children always copying the actions from actors and they trying them at home, so bad attitude would be affecting in their life. The other phenomenon is someone who killed by his/her relative, because of losing gambling in football match and he/she does not give money as tribute. In term of harmony in sweet home, people should control their emotion, while watching a TV.

Instead of watching a TV, it might be beneficial to keep relationship with neighbors and family’s member. I argue that people can be a good person while they have a good relationship. For example, when I visited my friends, I always watching a TV, and I usually laugh and feel relax, so do my friends, it seems that television makes me keeping in touch with them. For some reasons, people may have an experience which is a memorable moment and gain more knowledge by watching it.

In summary, television gives positive and negative impact, such as conflict, but I believe it has more positively, people can stay in touch also obtain more knowledge and experiences.

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Sentence: Sometimes, television able to destroy family life and any sense of community, it is dangerous.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to television and able

Sentence: While I accept that crime would be possibly occured, I believe that instead of visiting people or talking with our family we just watch television, it seems that television make people can stay in touch each other.
Description: The fragment television make people is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace make with verb, past tense

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