Today the high sales of of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real need of the society in which they are sold.To what extend do you agree or disagree.
As the world and the way of living advances new goods or products or improvised version of the goods that already exist are being launched.And at the same time to increased the sales of these good various advertisement to reflect these product are made with the help of stars and super stars.In short i agree with the above statement.
Since today's world have developed hugely in terms of technologies and sophisticated equipments,these business men used these technologies to advertise their goods or products because of the good result of such advertisement there products though not are part and parcel of our living does very good business and it help on expanding. The more popular the advertisement is the higher is the sales of these goods.keeping such benefits in view these business men try to make the products advertisement more popular by bringing in public favor ate stars and superstars.As an example various products like the lays and uncle chips though a very small product and not really needed in our society does makes high sale in the market as a result of there popular advertisement.
though not all the high sale product advertise are not needed in our society.there are some goods being advertised and does comes in real use in our society such as refrigerators and washing machines etc.But if compared and calculated the number of goods which are not the real needs of society out numbered that of the goods really needed.The more popular the advertisement of the goods higher will be sales of product regardless of its real needs in the society.To meet up with the human needs or we can say greed various products are being launched and similarly such advertisements are made to sale these products well.
Thus,from my point of view the goods though not the real need of society tends to have higher sale rate if the goods are advertised popular,but still they are some goods whose advertisement are popular as well as these goods does have real needs in our society.
Sentence: As the world and the way of living advances new goods or products or improvised version of the goods that already exist are being launched.And at the same time to increased the sales of these good various advertisement to reflect these product are made with the help of stars and super stars.In short i agree with the above statement.
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Sentence: Since today's world have developed hugely in terms of technologies and sophisticated equipments,these business men used these technologies to advertise their goods or products because of the good result of such advertisement there products though not are part and parcel of our living does very good business and it help on expanding.The more popular the advertisement is the higher is the sales of these goods.keeping such benefits in view these business men try to make the products advertisement
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Sentence: though not all the high sale product advertise are not needed in our society.there are some goods being advertised and does comes in real use in our society such as refrigerators and washing machines etc.But if compared and calculated the number of goods which are not the real needs of society out numbered that of the goods really needed.The more popular the advertisement of the goods higher will be sales of product regardless of its real needs in the society.To meet up with the human needs or
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