Topic 145: Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, advertising is being popular society and have big impact on population. Some people consider that advertising contribut us to buy unnecessary thing . Although others believe that it tell us about latest inventions.
There several reasons to advertise things which people do not completely recognize. The best way to tell the people about new beneficial thing is tell through advertising. Life is rapidly changing and it is really difficult to decide which product can improve your life. Indeed , products that people have influence the quality of life. For inctance , i am person which love to watch TV. So for me characteristic of television is truly important. If i follow adverticement , i can easily find stuff with best attributes.
However , advertising can inspire people to waste their money on things , that they really do not need . A lot of people trust to advertising, so they can be taken in . Furthermore , if beautifull models demonstrate the product in adverticement , people will assume that they will look as models.
To conclude, advertising which we see everyday does not always offer to us beneficial stuff.
Sentence: Although others believe that it tell us about latest inventions.
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Sentence: The best way to tell the people about new beneficial thing is tell through advertising.
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Sentence: Some people consider that advertising contribut us to buy unnecessary thing .
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Sentence: For inctance , i am person which love to watch TV.
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Sentence: If i follow adverticement , i can easily find stuff with best attributes.
Error: adverticement Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: Furthermore , if beautifull models demonstrate the product in adverticement , people will assume that they will look as models.
Error: adverticement Suggestion: advertisement
Error: beautifull Suggestion: beautiful
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