The two graphs below show the percentage of smokers and the consumption of alcohol in litres in selected countries, for the period 1960-2000. Summarise the information by choosing and reporting the key feature, and make any relevant comparisons.

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The two graphs below show the percentage of smokers and the consumption of alcohol in litres in selected countries, for the period 1960-2000. Summarise the information by choosing and reporting the key feature, and make any relevant comparisons.

The pictures describe amount of alcohol that is consumed by person and proposition of smokers in some states during 1960-2000. Generally, at 1980 onwards, both of percentage of smokers and consumption of alcohol decreased.

In Japan and USA, percentage of people who smoke declined steadily in 1960 onwards. The situation was almost same in Holland, although it remained before at 1970 bega to fall toward. The next graph shows that in Holland the number of consuming alcohol inclined and rached the peak at 1980. Then declined slowly and remained at the end. The USA alcohol comsumption graph illustrate that litres of consuming alcohol remained reasonably. On the other hand, consumption of alcohol in Turkey had been up and down and got the top at 1980.

Interestigly, the pattern of smokers percentage graphs are similar for those three states (Japan, USA, Holland). That id diferent from alcohol consumption graph movement in each country. Therefore, it can be sum that both of litre of alcohol consumption and smokers percentage went down in the middle period or 1980.

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Sentence: The USA alcohol comsumption graph illustrate that litres of consuming alcohol remained reasonably.
Description: The fragment graph illustrate that is rare
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Sentence: The situation was almost same in Holland, although it remained before at 1970 bega to fall toward.
Error: bega Suggestion: began

Sentence: The next graph shows that in Holland the number of consuming alcohol inclined and rached the peak at 1980.
Error: rached Suggestion: reached

Sentence: The USA alcohol comsumption graph illustrate that litres of consuming alcohol remained reasonably.
Error: comsumption Suggestion: consumption

Sentence: That id diferent from alcohol consumption graph movement in each country.
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Error: diferent Suggestion: different

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