The two graphs below show the persentage of smokers and the consuption of alcohol in litres in selected countries, for the period 1960 to 2000
These two graphs illustrate the percentage of population who smoke everyday and how many litres alcohol consumption per person in three chosen regions throughout 4 decade, 1960 to 2000.
First graph shows comparison level of population smoker in USA, Japan, and Holland. In generally, it can be seen that percentage smoker in every country decrease. In USA remained stable in first decade, then declined peak and feel steady towards the end of the fourth decade. Japan and Holland the general trend was downward slowly in two first decade. Japan slowly down in two last decade, while Holland continued declined steadily.
Second graph represent that rank of alcohol consumption in litres per person among Turkey, Holland, and USA. The beginning 1960, Turkey be the highest amount consumption of alcohol. It is rose steadily until 1980, then fell back steadily too. Different from Holland that rose peak until 1980, then decrease slightly toward 1990, and levelled of to end 2000. USA generally fluctuated slightly.
Overall, it could be concluded that at least percentage of population who smoke everyday decade by decade decline steadily. And the majority people who consumption alcohol increase.
Sentence: Japan and Holland the general trend was downward slowly in two first decade.
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Sentence: Japan slowly down in two last decade, while Holland continued declined steadily.
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Suggestion: Refer to continued and declined
Sentence: Second graph represent that rank of alcohol consumption in litres per person among Turkey, Holland, and USA.
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Sentence: It is rose steadily until 1980, then fell back steadily too.
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Suggestion: Refer to is and rose
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