When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Indeed this argumentation we cannot force ourselves to against globalization. Growing of technology and descending of traditional skill is a paradox phenomenon. As a realist I hesitant they both of them can grow linearly. One of them becoming main and others going marginal, we can see in the three part of our family daily, such as in the house, school, and work.

Start at home, mother cooking skill in the past altered in modern one. Nowadays mother in a big city prefer using instant seasoning which sell in the market to make originally from traditional recipe. Not only preparing has seasoning changes, but also the way to cook. Cooking Rendang, (traditional cuisine from west Sumatra) for example, in the previous they make it for hours in the traditional stove, otherwise now serving quick from microwave.

In the school our child does not deeply about traditional game such as (kelereng and main karet), they busy with virtual game on their gadget. Traditional values while children playing is gone. Children play and socialize to each other in autistic way, they can de quiet each other while sit next to a person, in the same time they connected to other in some city.

Presently we did not see farmer threat their field manually, all the electronic farming stuff is already stayed everywhere. Axe, hoe, knife change to vehicle which can do all of the function completely. The administration is department in the office, practically storage their hundred files only in a flash disk. In other field business supported by modern banking service to pay and buy each other, conversely meeting transaction nowadays slowly leaved.

In my conclusion, I can say it worthless to take traditional way in globalization era, because there are a lot of benefits whom can get from the modern ways. Thus I did not deny that traditional ways has a local wisdom which can guide us in many way of life.

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Sentence: As a realist I hesitant they both of them can grow linearly.
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Sentence: Nowadays mother in a big city prefer using instant seasoning which sell in the market to make originally from traditional recipe.
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace prefer with verb, past tense

Sentence: The administration is department in the office, practically storage their hundred files only in a flash disk.
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