when a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep the alive.to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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when a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep the alive.
to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays, the society of life is surrounded by technology. However it will destruct the traditional way of life. In another hand, the good user of technology will confront that problem.

The first user, smart user, can manipulate technology into something creative and valuable. The good consumer of the advance computer would operate it in the proper way. At the present day, as well-known that cultural art in rural area is less intention. However, it would be restricted by computer, if the smart user’s aim is bringing benefit thorough wide area, while he operates computer. He could save the classical tradition with recording it into computer and delivering it into global world within internet connection.

In another hand, the consumptive user would be going to be selfish. He controls computer only for fulfilling desire of playing rather than local environment intention. As a result, he would leave the cultural custom, visiting the sickness, and turn to text message of sorry in Facebook. This sad sight is the portrait of being controlled-user to computer.

Admittedly, the consumer of computer would be conquered by technology if they do not apply it effectively, however it could be changed if creative user operates it by doing some hopeful into local environment. NBC news reported in 2004, there were number of consumer’s technology who used it for studying about cultural studies in appropriate way. In another hand, 20% of dummy users used it only for playing.

Finally, classical culture would be endangered by technology if the user cannot apply it well.

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Sentence: NBC news reported in 2004, there were number of consumer's technology who used it for studying about cultural studies in appropriate way.
Suggestion: NBC news reported in 2004, there were a number of consumer technologies which are used for studying about cultural studies in appropriate way.

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