Write a letter to your friend and ask to take care of your children while you are away on a business trip overseas. In your letter include
- What their likes and dislikes in food are.
- What activities they like the most.
- Suggest an arrangement for you to pick them up after the trip.
Dear Rahi,
I am writing to ask your help for take care of my children during my business trip. As you know, this year I was very busy and I had a lot of trip but most of them were short. Unfortunately, this time my trip will be more than ten days and I have to go to another country. Can you believe that?
My children Hessam and Helma like other children. They have some hobbies. I think is very helpful if I share some of this thing with you. First of all, unfortunately, my children do not like milk at all. Instead of, they died for chocolate and it is not good for them, so please be careful. They like Pasta, kebab, rice and cheese.
My daughter Helma very likes to play with her dulls most of the time. She also likes watch cartoons like Tom and Jerry. My son Hessam is very good football player and also he likes bike.
I will go on Friday and come back on Tuesday. I am not sure what time exactly I will arrive. So I will pick up them in the afternoon around six o'clock. Do you think this time is good or not?
I do not how thank you, see you soon.
With love,
Mari.
Sentence: I am writing to ask your help for take care of my children during my business trip.
Description: The word take is not usually used as a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: help for taking care of
Sentence: My daughter Helma very likes to play with her dulls most of the time.
Description: The fragment her dulls most is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace dulls with dolls
flaws:
Avg. Sentence Length: 11.882 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.873 7.5
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 10
No. of Words: 202 200
No. of Characters: 779 1000
No. of Different Words: 120 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.77 4.0
Average Word Length: 3.856 4.6
Word Length SD: 1.979 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 31 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 22 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 12 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 4 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 11.882 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.873 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.412 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.178 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4