Writing task 1

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Writing task 1

The pie charts give information about the expenditure in a certain UK school per year, and its difference between 1981, 1991 ad 2001.

Overall, it can be clearly seen that almost half of the school budget is spent on teachers' salaries.

Obviously, the salaries of teachers always outnumber the salaries of other workers, 40% and 28% allocated for them in 1981, 50% and 22% in 1991, 45% and 15% in 2001, respectively. Expenditure on educational resources like books was growing from 15% to 20% in the first decade. However, in 2001 it became much lower, 9% of the total money. As regards, furniture and equipment, the proportions were fluctuating from 15% to 5%, then ending with 23% in 2001. The least amount of school money was spent on insurance. Even though its figure was growing every 10 years, finally hitting a peak of merely 8%. This end s my report.

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flaws:
No. of Words: 150 200
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4

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para 1: introduction
para 2: body 1
para 3: body 2
para 4: conclusion

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or
para 1: introduction
para 2: conclusion
para 3: body 1
para 4: body 2

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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 150 200
No. of Characters: 671 1000
No. of Different Words: 104 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.5 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.473 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.599 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 46 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 31 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 20 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.118 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.366 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.526 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.058 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4