Writing task 1 from test 2, IELTS book edition 3
The chart illustrates the amount spent on six consumer goods i.e. personal stereos, tennis racquets, perfumes, compact disks, toys and photographic films in four European countries i.e. Germany, Italy, France and Britain.
Britain has spent highest on the given six consumer goods among all the four European countries.While, Germany is almost constant spender on the same consumer goods. Moreover, Italy and France are the moderate spenders with some ups and downs . In personal stereos category, France legs behind Italy by approximately 5%. Furthermore, in compact disks and and photographic film category ,France leads Italy by approximately 10-20%.
It is concluded from above analysis that maximum amount spends on the photographic films as compared other five consumer goods . However, minimum amount spends on the personal stereos among all the six consumer goods.
Sentence: Furthermore, in compact disks and and photographic film category ,France leads Italy by approximately 10-20.
Description: The token and is not usually followed by a conjunction, coordinating
Suggestion: Refer to and and and
flaws:
No. of Words: 132 150 (need minimum 150 words)
No. of Characters: 716 800
No. of Different Words: 74 100
Don't leave a blank space before punctuation marks.
Leave a blank space after punctuation marks.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 8
No. of Words: 132 150
No. of Characters: 716 800
No. of Different Words: 74 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.39 3.7
Average Word Length: 5.424 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.562 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 56 50
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 30 20
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 10 10
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.318 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.506 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.696 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.196 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 3