WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
The diagram graph describes the silkworm life cycle from egg to moth, while the other graph shows production of silk cloth.
The most striking feature from the graph is that the life cycle of the silkworm from egg to moth is quite short, it takes only less than 2 months. Silkworm eggs need 10 days to become silkworm larva. Larva is the longest part of the silkworm life. They spend about 1-1.5 month, meanwhile they consume mulberry leaves as their food. After that, they begin to produce a silk thread. It takes around 3-8 days to become completely a perfect cocoon. It takes around more than 2-weeks for them to come out from their cocoon to become adult moth.
According to the second graph, the production of the silk cloth is that the human intersect the life cycle of the silkworm when in the cocoon stage. The first stage is select the best cocoons that will be use as the materials. After that, we boil it in the water to kill the worm inside. Then unwind the silkworm string while twist and weave the string.
All in all, the first graph suggest that the life cycle of silkworm is short enough. Meanwhile, the second graph indicates silk cloth production from cocoon to become useable string.
Sentence: According to the second graph, the production of the silk cloth is that the human intersect the life cycle of the silkworm when in the cocoon stage.
Description: An adjective is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to human and intersect
Sentence: The first stage is select the best cocoons that will be use as the materials.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to is and select
Sentence: All in all, the first graph suggest that the life cycle of silkworm is short enough.
Description: The fragment graph suggest that is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace suggest with verb, past tense
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.357 21.0
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 10
No. of Words: 215 200
No. of Characters: 964 1000
No. of Different Words: 108 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.829 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.484 4.6
Word Length SD: 1.986 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 53 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 31 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 21 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 11 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.357 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.171 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.374 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.544 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4