You are working in a very busy office. A particular piece of office equipment is not working properly. Write a letter to the manager and say
- What is happening with the equipment?
- How does this affects your work?
- What do you suggest to be done?
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am one of sales manager at Jason branch. I am writing to inform you our colorful printer does not work anymore.
Since last July, we have had some problems with this device. First problem we experienced was the printer could not print colorful paper. I thought its cartridge should be replaced, however I was wrong. Besides, after every print we should reset it because it could not recognize papers any more. After all this problems, unfortunately, last day we could not turn on it any more.
As you know, we print all our invoices and our contracts on the paper, so without the printer we face with a big problem and we cannot sales any more. In addition, black Friday is coming and we expected sells most of the our product but without printer we will be in big trouble.
I think this matter deserves you urgent attention by replace this out of work printer with new one. I am very appreciate if you could send it before black Friday.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Yours faithfully,
M.XX.
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Hello sir, I…
Hello sir,
I am Kavita Rajput, floor incharge from retail department, Rajouri Garden store. I am writing this letter to inform you that payment kiosk number 2 is not working from last 1 week so merely one kiosk is working.
This is month closing time and any how I have to met my store sales target, moreover, external audit also can happen any time, but due to kiosk 1,I have to take all the cash payments inside the store at commercial counter, owing to customer wait time is going up, and customer escalations are also increasing at store. I am managing the store with less men-power as my two agents are on sick leaves, therefore agents are not getting time for up-selling.
I have raised this issue to IT team and did call log twice but they are unable to take system on remote. Please arrange a technician to resolve this issue as sales of my store is hampering a lot.
Looking forward for some positive response as soon as possible and prompt action.
Your faithfully
Kavita Rajput
Yours
Sentence: After all this problems, unfortunately, last day we could not turn on it any more.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and problems
Sentence: As you know, we print all our invoices and our contracts on the paper, so without the printer we face with a big problem and we cannot sales any more.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to cannot and sales
First problem we experienced was the printer could not print colorful paper.
First problem we experienced was that the printer could not print colorful paper.
we expected sells most of the our product
we expected to sell most of the our products
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