You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.You have recently started work in a new company.Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter,explain why you changed jobsdescribe your new jobtell him / her your other news

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
You have recently started work in a new company.
Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter,
explain why you changed jobs
describe your new job
tell him / her your other news

Dear,
Tajveer

How are you ? I hope you will be quite well. Sorry for being out of touch for a short while. I wanted you to know latest information about me.

The most blissful news is that I have chosen my desired job of teaching and therefore left my previous job. As you know the working atmosphere of my previous job of computer operator was not satisfactory to me. Adding to it, an atronomical pressure of work had also got on my nerves. But, I am so rejoiced to find a complete package of my expectations involving handsome salary package, healthy work environment, comfortable working hours and so on.

Aside from my new job, I have also bought my personal car, allowing me to commute from home to work conveniently.

So, how about you ? I hope you would like to visit my home in your winter holidays to have a great fun.
please write a letter, I will be waiting eagerly to know something new to you.

best regard
jasvinder

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Average: 7 (3 votes)
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No. of Words: 165 200

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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 165 200
No. of Characters: 703 1000
No. of Different Words: 103 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.584 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.261 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.605 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 43 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 33 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 24 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 11 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.075 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.41 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.626 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.189 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4

sir could u tell me how to make paragraphs for informal letter ...becoz I jst tried letter frst time n I dont know properly about structure n paragraphs ..

n do tell what else should be improved to reach 8.0 in this letter ???