The chart below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared.
These two charts below provide the information of adult education based on survey results. The first chart shows the reasons while the second one portrays the percentage of various way to share the education cost.
First glance at the first chart indicates that, ‘interest in subject’ become the highest rate to become the motivation in adult education, followed by ‘gaining qualification’ reason with negligible rate. The merely causes are including ‘helpful for current job’, ’improve prospect of promotion’, and ‘enjoy learning of studying’ with approximately 20%, which ‘able to change job’ and ‘meeting new people’ become the insignificant reasons based on gaining the lessen rate on the survey result.
Moving to the pie chart, the survey evidence that ‘individual’ gain the largest rate of the way education should be shared with, followed by ‘employer’ with slight difference, and ‘tax payer’ at ease. Hence, it proves that the adults use their own money to improve their education based on their interest in subject occasion.
To sum up, the biggest reason of study and the way people cost their tuition fee have the same rate exactly, for around 40% respectively.
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have the same rate exactly, for around 40% respectively.
have the same rate around 40%.
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