The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where rel

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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The amount of males and females in Britain in advanced education in three season are seen in the graph, whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

In season 1970/71, there were 1.100.000 males having further education that divided to 1.000.000 full-time education and 100.000 part-time education and there were 750.000 females with full-time education and 50.000 females with part-time education from 800.000 women, In the next decade (1980/81), the total number of men group is reduced to 1.000.000 which split to decreased of full-time education males group to 850.000 but the opposite was increased to 150.000 men. However, the number of females group grew-up to 1.100.000, both of full-time and part-time education females were increased to 850.000 and 250.000 women.

In 1990/91 as the third decades represented the highest grow-up of full-time education females to 1.100.000 which followed by part-time education group with few rise-up about 50.000 become 300.000 women, that means the total number was 1.400.000 women The men group also indicated raise of advanced student about 200.000 men that consists of 900.000 full-time education and 300.000 part-time education.

In conclusion, the graph showed the rise-up trend of women group in both types of education. It is contrasted with men group that has a fluctuating pathway.

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there were 1.100.000 males have further education
there were 1.100.000 males who have further education

the total number of men group reduced to 1.000.000
the total number of men group is reduced to 1.000.000

but the opposite was increase to 150.000 men.
but the opposite was increased to 150.000 men.

were increase to 850.000
were increased to 850.000

group that have fluctuating pathway.
group that has a fluctuating pathway.

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