Describing Process of Making Chewing Gum (Revise)
The diagrams present the production process of chewing gum. Process of this making contain of three steps before it is eatable; melting, mixing, shaping, and also packaging.
Firstly, the pieces of ingredient, contain of rubber, put onto a high temperatures drum until the figure shaped into single mass. Then, this shape is strained until all of the fluid eliminating and immediately ready to proceed.
Secondly, lack of moisture rubber is moved into another container and blend with another additional. There are flavorings, softeners, and also sweeteners added. The mixture then sheeted to roller machine and shaped slightly turn out to be sheets. Sheets of gum are grouped based on each flavor before it slice.
Afterward, sheet of gums are cut onto four-sided figure then fragmented into pieces.
Finally, the gum is ensuing to package. Even though all of the procedure was automatically machined, packaging should be doing by human. This process needs carefulness to surround each of gum well. In the last, chewing gum later on ready to distribute and blow for reducing your stress.
the pieces of ingredient, contain of rubber, put onto
the pieces of ingredient, which contains of rubber, was put into
put onto a high temperatures drum until the figure shaped into single mass.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to temperatures and drum
Sentence: Process of this making contain of three steps before it is eatable;
Sentence: Process of this making contains of three steps before it is eatable;
Sentence: Afterward, sheet of gums are cut onto four-sided figure then fragmented into pieces.
Sentence: Afterward, sheet of gums is cut into a four-sided figure and then fragmented into pieces.
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