The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

The map illustrates the site of a school in 2004 and the plans for the school site in 2004.

Over the period, the area witnessed dramatic changes. It is observed from the graph that, there will be a drastic development to the school as well as its size and students number. The size of school area will be increased due to the establishment of new infrastructures; road, school buildings and car park.

The most noticeable features are the number of students. The number of students in that school was 600 in 2004 and by 2024, the prediction for the students number is 1000. Due to this incremental number of students, the school will require to expand its size. The school building 3 to the east of the school building 1 and 2, is planned to be built. This area used to be for the sports centre in 2004. This sports field to the north-east was knocked down and will be relocated to the south of the school.

A car park 2 also is predicted to be introduced on the far east-north of the school site, allowing students access to the school. A part from the trees, the road has been constructed to connect the road to the main entrance of the west and the car park 2 on the north.

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Sentence: It is observed from the graph that, there will be a drastic development to the school as well as its size and students number.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to students and number

This area used to be for the sports centre in 2004.
This area will be used for the sports centre in 2004.

Sentence: The number of students in that school was 600 in 2004 and by 2024, the prediction for the students number is 1000.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to students and number

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