The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross section of 100.000 people asking if they travelled abroad and why they travel for period 1994-1998. The second chart shows their destination inthe same period.Write a report.

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The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross section of 100.000 people asking if they travelled abroad and why they travel for period 1994-1998. The second chart shows their destination inthe same period.

Write a report.

The tables show the number of UK's travelers in 1994-1998. In more detail, the first table depicts the number of travelers for various purposes and the second one shows the comparison of some destinations in the same period.

It can be summarized that most of UK's citizen took a travel to spend the holiday. It was in the first place and its number had increased in 4 years. In the second place, people tend to go abroad for business inquiry. The trend was similar within this period. It soared gradually even though the total was smaller than for holiday purpose. In the last place was for visit friend and relatives. The total was less than other reasons. It had a fluctuation and finally reached a peak in 1998. It was 3.051 people went overseas to visit acquaintances and family. And the number for other reasons were quiet small but it had an increase even tough it was not a significant number.

From the second table, it can be concluded that the most popular destination among UK's citizen was Western area with 19,371 from 22,072 total routes. It reached a peak in 1998 along with the increasing number of overseas trip. In the second place Other areas had a significant number also, the trend went up and it was similar condition with North America as destination.

To sum up, along with the rise number of UK's travelers, the destination place became more popular also.

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The total was less than other reasons.
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It was 3.051 people went overseas to visit acquaintances and family.
It was 3.051 people who went overseas to visit acquaintances and family.

And the number for other reasons were quiet small
And the numbers ... were quiet small

and it was similar condition
and it has a similar condition

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