The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph illustrates about global water use in three section such as agriculture, industrial and domestic use and the second table provides about water consumption in Brazil and Congo in 2000. The most prominent in first feature which is water function highest by agriculture than by domestic use and for second feature is Brazil is most water consume in 2000.
In 1900, Agriculture was need water for around 500 km3 while industrial and domestic use only need 1 km3. Farmer have had been more water for more field increasingly. Agriculture increased slightly stability until in 2000 years. It was 3,000 km3 have to irrigate by water. Whereas, for industrial and domestic started rose in 1950. For industrial had overtook domestic until it was need water around 500 km3 to use and around 200 km3 to use for domestic in 2000.
Brazil had higher population than Democratic Republic of Congo in 2000. For many population, Brazil spent many water in 2000. It was 26.500 km2 and 359 m3 contrast with 100 km2 and 8 m3 for 5.2 million in Democratic Republic of Congo.
To sum up, the given data indicates that countries who produce in agriculture have more water to irrigate the field and who have many population are need more water for each activities.
The most prominent in first feature which is water function highest by agriculture than by domestic use and for second feature is Brazil is most water consume in 2000.
The most prominent feature in the graph is that water functions highest by agriculture than by domestic use, and for the second feature, Brazil has most water consumption in 2000.
Agriculture was need water for around 500 km3
Agriculture needs water for around 500 km3
Farmer have had been more water for more field increasingly.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?
until in 2000 years
until in 2000 years
until in yea 2000
It was 3,000 km3 have to irrigate by water.
Description: two verbs in one sentence. can you re-write this sentence?
until it was need water around 500 km3
until it was needing water around 500 km3
who have many population are need more water for each activities.
who have more populations need more water for each activity.
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