The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
The line graph compares changes in the amount of food consumption; meat, salt, fish in China over 25 peroide of years. It is measured in grams.
Overall, it can be seen that the consumption of fish increased, wherease the consumption of salt decreased. In addition, the consumtion of meat, while a relatively low level, rose steadily during this periode.
From the graph, China's people consumed more fish than either meat or salt during this period. The consumption of fish had gradually rebound about 600 grams in 1985 and 1995. It than increased dramatically and reached peak about 850 grams in 2010.
However, there was a gradually drop in salt consumption. The number of consumed went down from almost 500 grams per person in 1985 to only 200 grams in 2010. The amount of meat consumed start about 100 grams in 1989. In contras, this steadily rose throughout the periode. By 2010, it was at the same level as the consumption of salt.
in the amount of food consumption
in the amount of food consumptions
over 25 peroide of years.
over 25 years.
there was a gradually drop
there was a gradual drop
China's people
Chinese people
Sentence: It than increased dramatically and reached peak about 850 grams in 2010.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a conjunction, subordinating
Suggestion: Refer to It and than
Sentence: The number of consumed went down from almost 500 grams per person in 1985 to only 200 grams in 2010.
Description: A verb, past participle is not usually followed by a verb, past tense
Suggestion: Refer to consumed and went
Sentence: The line graph compares changes in the amount of food consumption; meat, salt, fish in China over 25 peroide of years.
Error: peroide Suggestion: period
Sentence: Overall, it can be seen that the consumption of fish increased, wherease the consumption of salt decreased.
Error: wherease Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In addition, the consumtion of meat, while a relatively low level, rose steadily during this periode.
Error: consumtion Suggestion: consumption
Error: periode Suggestion: period
Sentence: In contras, this steadily rose throughout the periode.
Error: periode Suggestion: period
Error: contras Suggestion: No alternate word
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No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 4.5 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 12 10
No. of Words: 162 200
No. of Characters: 750 1000
No. of Different Words: 91 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.568 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.63 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.472 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 44 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 34 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 24 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.61 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.167 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.391 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.576 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.057 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4