The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph compares the number of people who visited three different museums from
June to September in the year, 2013.

It is clear that British Museum was by far the most popular place among visitors. In contrast, Science Museum attracted the least number of people compared to the other two sites, but its popularity increased close to Natural History Museum in September.

In June, British Museum attracted the highest number of people with 600 people. The other two exhibitions, Natural Museum and Science Museum, by contrast, were visited by less number of attendees, accounting for 550 and 400 visitors, respectively. By the end of July, ranking in terms of the number of visitors among the three museums stayed the constant. The number of visitors to British Museum fluctuated, from around 750 people in the middle of July to nearly 600 people in the end of the month. Unlike British Museum, Science and Natural Historical sites saw the declining number of visitors. The number of visitors to Natural History Museum dropped by around 160 attendees, while that of people who visited Science Museum fell to just above 300.

From August onwards, all three museums experienced an onward trend in the number of visitors. The number of visitors to British Museum rose to 650, that of attendees to Natural History Museum increased to approximately 480, and finally that of people to Science Museum soared to around 470 by the middle of September in 2013.

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