The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
Two graphs show visit to and from UK from 1979 to 1999 and the most popular countries visited by UK resident in 1999.
In term of visit to and from the UK, the general trend was increased not only visitors it abroad by UK residents but also visit to UK by overseas residents. The number of visitors from UK increases more than 40 millions visitors in 20 years. In 1999 mostly visitors from UK visited france and spain, visitor from UK to that caountries around 10 millions visitors. In other side number of visitor to UK lower than from UK in 20 years just incerase not more than 20 million visitors.
Increasing number of visitor to and from UK occured along 1979-1999, but sharply incerasing for visitors number from UK after 1984, for visitor to UK sharply increasing occured after 1984 untill 1989, after that the interasing number almost same with before 1984.
In 1999 there were around 50 millions visitors from UK. Less than 5 millions visitors visited turkey, and this situation similar to greece, and USA. The other visitors visited spain and france, but number of visitor to france higher than visitor to spain.
the general trend was increased not only visitors it abroad by UK residents
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and this situation similar to greece
and this situation is similar to Greece
but number of visitor to france higher than visitor to spain.
but number of visitor to france is higher than that to Spain.
Sentence: In 1999 mostly visitors from UK visited france and spain, visitor from UK to that caountries around 10 millions visitors.
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Sentence: In other side number of visitor to UK lower than from UK in 20 years just incerase not more than 20 million visitors.
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Sentence: Increasing number of visitor to and from UK occured along 1979-1999, but sharply incerasing for visitors number from UK after 1984, for visitor to UK sharply increasing occured after 1984 untill 1989, after that the interasing number almost same with before 1984.
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Error: incerasing Suggestion: increasing
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Error: interasing Suggestion: increasing
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