The numbers below show basic information about uses of leisure time among different age groups

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The numbers below show basic information about uses of leisure time among different age groups.

The chart demonstrates the quantity of numbers about pastimes of various groups of people differentiated by age. Overall, it can be clearly seen that young people waste more time to use computer than reading, whilst old people spend more time to reading on the weekends.

According to the data in the chart, people of 13-19 years old spend five minutes to reading, whereas they waste more to computer which consists of seventy five minutes. The minutes, spent to reading and computer, are the same in people’s pastime who are 20-65 years old which composed from thirty minutes. People who are 66 and above years old, engaged in reading more than physical activities such as sports and exercises, so it takes from them 60 and 20 minutes respectively.

Compared these groups of people by aged, we can make a decision that people who are 20-65 years old are much more interested in physical activities than other types of leisure time, as well as older people choose to spend their leisure time go in for intellectual activities.

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The minutes, spent to reading and computer, are the same in people’s pastime who are 20-65 years old which composed from thirty minutes
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older people choose to spend their leisure time go in for intellectual activities.
older people choose to spend their leisure time going in for intellectual activities.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 10
No. of Words: 175 200
No. of Characters: 834 1000
No. of Different Words: 94 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.637 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.766 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.423 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 57 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 43 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 23 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 10 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.512 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.555 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.76 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.309 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4