rates of smoking in Someland- men and women

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rates of smoking in Someland- men and women

The presented graph illustrates the changes on the smoking percentage in Someland over a period of 40 years. From the overall graph it can be easily seen that the figures of men shows a downward, while indicators of women rising a bit less than 100.

To go into more details, the number of men decreased slightly at 500 in 1975, whose trend experienced dramatic fall at 400 during next one decade, whereas this mentioned steady decline hiting its lowest point at approximately 230 at the end of the given period of the time.

As to women, there was a gradual increase from just under 100 in 1960 to more or less the 200 in 1965, which accompanied by a period of stability in the next five years at about 190 ,where demonstrated sharp surge from 1970 onwards, then only bounced back to 200 in 2000.

To sum up, it is clear from the data given that there are quite significant variations in the smoking patterns.

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while indicators of women rising a bit
while indicators of women are rising a bit

the number of men decreased slightly at 500 in 1975, whose trend experienced dramatic fall at 400 during next one decade
the number of men decreased slightly at 500 in 1975, and the trend experienced a dramatic fall at 400 during next one decade

Sentence: To go into more details, the number of men decreased slightly at 500 in 1975, whose trend experienced dramatic fall at 400 during next one decade, whereas this mentioned steady decline hiting its lowest point at approximately 230 at the end of the given period of the time.
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