the table bellow shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980.

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the table bellow shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980.

The table reveals the number of incarceration in several countries within 5 decades.

Firstly, the highest proportion of imprisonment is in either United State or Canada whereas the lowest figures are in either Great Britain or Australia.

Although the number of imprisonment is the smallest one in 1930 in Great Britain, till 1980 it increased in a distinguished way and became 3 times more than it was. While at the same time, the amount of confinement in United State fluctuated from 120 thousand to approximately 140 thousand within 60 years and reached the peak. However, in New Zealand, the quantity plunged within first decade then it started to treble gradually. At a glance, a similar trend occurred in Australia as in United state and it in the beginning and in the end of the years.

Nevertheless, Canada was the most significant in 1930, it became in the second place where the United State is the highest in 1980.

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Canada was the most significant in 1930, it became in the second place where the United State is the highest in 1980.
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