task 1 cambridge 9 paper 3

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task 1 cambridge 9 paper 3

These four pie charts illustrate comparison of different age group populations in two different countries in 2000 and then in 2050. It is very obvious in first glance that in 2050 both countries Yamen and Italy mainly consist of middle age group ( 15 to 59 years).

firstly in 2000 yamen,s population is mostly consisting of age group (0- 14 years )and make 50.1 %of total population. second most populated age group is young age 15-59 years (46.3 %).60 +years inhabitant are only 3.6 %. then after half century proportion of 15- 59 years age group superseded 0- 14 years age group. 60 +years still contribute minimal part in population which is 5.7 %.

on the other hand in italy 15-59 years age group is dominent with 61.6 %. 60 + year age group in around 24.1% followed by 0 14 year age group. in 2050 ratio of 60 + age group increased to 42-3% but still less then 15 509 years age group. in age gr 0-14 age there is a slight decline from 14-3 % to 11.5 %.

although some small differences are seen both countries comparison in 50 years time period. these changes are could be result of good health care and new technology revolution.

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yamen,s population
yamen's population

some small differences are seen both countries
some small differences are seen in both countries

Sentence: on the other hand in italy 15-59 years age group is dominent with 61.6 .
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
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No. of Sentences: 7 10
No. of Words: 201 200
No. of Characters: 891 1000
No. of Different Words: 115 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.765 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.433 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.4 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 43 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 32 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 25 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.257 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
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Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.78 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.166 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4