You celebrate your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much.
Write a letter to the restaurant to thank them. Mention the food, service and the atmosphere. Also suggest any improvements to make things better.
Dear Sir,
I was one of the costumers in your restaurant. Last week on Sunday night, I celebrated my birthday party with my friends. The restaurant was very appreciative my party. I was thankful and extremely grateful that has given a chance to arrange at there. My friends and I enjoyed the party, and it was great success.
Many things support the success my birthday party, such as ambiance and service. All my friends particularly relished the relaxed attitude of the restaurant. They enjoyed decorate the room with flowers and carving which like a green house. The service was professional yet intimate, and along with the quality of the dishes served. They loved a steak of mammoth proportions and a giant fresh and crisp salad as appetizer with good composition make a delicious accompaniment by selection of appropriately selected seasonal vegetables. For dessert, the rich black forest was yummy.
The restaurant had great service, but I would to suggest one improvements. When I had eaten steak of mammoth, I did not found toothpick. I knew that it is little things, but it would be a good point to your restaurant.
Once more I would like to thank you for my birthday dinner.
Yours faithfully,
Yamin
Sentence: The restaurant was very appreciative my party.
Description: An adjective is not usually followed by a determiner, possessive
Suggestion: Refer to appreciative and my
Sentence: I was thankful and extremely grateful that has given a chance to arrange at there.
Description: The fragment to arrange at is not usually followed by there
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace there with their
Sentence: Many things support the success my birthday party, such as ambiance and service.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by a determiner, possessive
Suggestion: Refer to success and my
Sentence: They enjoyed decorate the room with flowers and carving which like a green house.
Description: A verb, past tense is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to enjoyed and decorate
Sentence: They loved a steak of mammoth proportions and a giant fresh and crisp salad as appetizer with good composition make a delicious accompaniment by selection of appropriately selected seasonal vegetables.
Description: The fragment composition make a is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace make with verb, past tense
Sentence: When I had eaten steak of mammoth, I did not found toothpick.
Description: The fragment not found toothpick is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace found with verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Sentence: I knew that it is little things, but it would be a good point to your restaurant.
Description: The fragment little things , is not usually preceded by is
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace is with are
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 10
No. of Words: 205 200
No. of Characters: 977 1000
No. of Different Words: 122 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.784 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.766 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.759 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 63 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 54 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 12.059 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.965 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.176 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.594 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4