You are hereYou recently visited a place that had a strong impact on you.Write a letter to a friend about the place. In your letter explain where the place was and how you got there, describe what you saw, and offer to take your friend there (Rewrite)

You recently visited a place that had a strong impact on you.Write a letter to a friend about the place. In your letter explain where the place was and how you got there, describe what you saw, and offer to take your friend there (Rewrite)


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You recently visited a place that had a strong impact on you.Write a letter to a friend about the place. In your letter explain where the place was and how you got there, describe what you saw, and offer to take your friend there (Rewrite)

Dear Sarah,

I am very excited to tell you about my holiday. I am just returned from France. When I was there, my friends and I were climbed a mountain called “Parleman” in French Alps. We drove a car for half way up the mountain. We stopped the road, put on our walking boots and we continued to the long effort way by walking.

Although we took the road in the beginning, it has completely our journey to climb. We had great scenery when we got the top the mountain. It was so awesome. We could see right across the town and in another side we could see the lake. There were the snow covered peaks of Mont Blanc. All of all, we got bewitch view.

We often go to the French for spending our holiday as you know. We plan a journey for vacation next time and I’d really want to take you there with me. I am sure you can get merit if you choose climbing like you enjoy project.

Looking forward for your next letter.

Regards,
Deis

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Score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 10
No. of Words: 181 200
No. of Characters: 725 1000
No. of Different Words: 117 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.668 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.006 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.001 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 40 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 31 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 12 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 3 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 10.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.455 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.235 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.597 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.205 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4