You are hereYou recently visited a place that had a strong impact on you.Write a letter to a friend about the place. In your letter explain where the place was and how you got there, describe what you saw, and offer to take your friend there (Rewrite)

You recently visited a place that had a strong impact on you.Write a letter to a friend about the place. In your letter explain where the place was and how you got there, describe what you saw, and offer to take your friend there (Rewrite)


Deis Rostiyanti's picture

By Deis Rostiyanti - Posted on 19 January 2014

Essay topic: 

You recently visited a place that had a strong impact on you.Write a letter to a friend about the place. In your letter explain where the place was and how you got there, describe what you saw, and offer to take your friend there (Rewrite)

Dear Sarah,

I am very excited to tell you about my holiday. I am just returned from France. When I was there, my friends and I were climbed a mountain called “Parleman” in French Alps. We drove a car for half way up the mountain. We stopped the road, put on our walking boots and we continued to the long effort way by walking.

Although we took the road in the beginning, it has completely our journey to climb. We had great scenery when we got the top the mountain. It was so awesome. We could see right across the town and in another side we could see the lake. There were the snow covered peaks of Mont Blanc. All of all, we got bewitch view.

We often go to the French for spending our holiday as you know. We plan a journey for vacation next time and I’d really want to take you there with me. I am sure you can get merit if you choose climbing like you enjoy project.

Looking forward for your next letter.

Regards,
Deis

Average: 7.5 (2 votes)
More essays by this user:
Looking for speaking partner/tutor/chat? Join the instant conversation now!
    
Something about you
Choose a nickname and enter at least one ID (Skype, MSN, QQ, ICQ or Yahoo) if you want to be listed!
Registered users only
Loading...
(121 users watching; 1 users on the list)
People online
Nickname Sex L Country Favorite topics Contact
bwosti himalayan

User comment: I just want to chat in English for a while to improve my speaking skills

It has been said that the world is becoming a global village in which there are no boundaries to trade and communication. Do the benefits of globalisation outweigh the drawbacks? bina
Nowadays, many people go shopping in their free time. Shopping has replaced many other activities that people choose as their hobby. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development? marzieh
Nowadays, there are various methods to relieve the pressure in modern life. Som take exercise. other work in their gardens. What do you think are the best way of reducing stress? jinjinlei2108
Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money other disagree and think that a good salary leads to better life. Discuss both these view and give your opinion edgar pandu putra
Today, high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of society in which they are sold.To what extent do you agree or disagree. fialka
The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit. fialka
Some ex-prisoners commit crimes after being released from the prison. What do you think is the cause? How can it be solved? devabe2005
Should money be spent on space exploration? To what extend do you agree? indra13 sticky icon
Do you agree newspapers will die out in the future? Narmin
The following show consumption of energy in 2009 and 2010. Write a summary of the information. Select and report the main features, and make comparison where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Neeshiya Fernando

Term
Keeping animals in captivity is cruel. There is no reason for zoos to exist in 21st century. How far you agree and disagree with this opinion? Give your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. broerjuang IELTS
The graph below discusses lives of men, women with no children and women with children in one region of canada. naresh dubaka IELTS
There is a growing demand for freshwater nowadays and this is becoming aglobal problem. Discuss the possiblecauses for it. What measures can betaken by governments and individuals toovercome this problems? Justin sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Even though globalization affects the world's economy in a very positive way.It's negative side should not be forgotten.Discuss singh deepsukh IELTS Writing Task II
The table below shows the average family income and expenses in the US in 1980 and 1985. Write a short report for a university lecture describing the changes. jason IELTS
People who watch a lot of violent television programs will find that this influences their behaviour when they are angry or upset. Do you agree? suman sharma IELTS
Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favor of t legend60 IELTS
some people agree with that teachers should be strict with their students, others believe that teachers with friendly approach will achieve better results. Discuss and give your opinion? bhinda jatt IELTS Writing Task II
Many people spend a lot of time using communication technologies. What are the reasons for this? What effects will this haveon our family and friends? Miachel sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
In almost all the coutries there are laws regulating the contents of films, videos, books and newspaper. Should the media be controlled in these ways? What are the benefits or risks of censorship? serene123 IELTS

Term
Prevention is better than cure. Do you agree or disagree that out of the country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health and education and preventive measures? laurieann_bantiling sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
The pie chart below show the responses by teachers of foreign language in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart show how m thanhdoan6992 IELTS Writing Task I
Some people think men and women have different natural abilities that make them suitable for different types of work. Others, however, believe that both men and women can be equally suited to do any type of work. Discuss both views and give your own opini wad al khalifa sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
In some countries, government safety laws include things such as wearing a hard hat on a building site or wearing safety clothes in certain factories.To what extent are laws of this kind a good idea? What sort of safety law would you introduce? bwosti IELTS Writing Task II
Some people find history a fascinating subject. Others say it is dull and has no place in modern life.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. eddysuaib sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrolSummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant PioPio IELTS Writing Task I
Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Anish Joseph sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Some think that these environmental problems are too big for individuals to be solved, while others think that individuals cannot solve these environmental problems unless governments make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Amarjeet saggu sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
The number of elderly people in the world is increasing. What do you think are the positive and negative effects of this trend? Anish Joseph IELTS Writing Task II
In many parts of the world there is continuous coverage of sport on television. Some people believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sport themselves. Discuss this view and give your opinion. dmelen IELTS Writing Task II

Some people find history a fascinating subject. Others say it is dull and has no place in modern life.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. eddysuaib sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Prevention is better than cure. Do you agree or disagree that out of the country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health and education and preventive measures? laurieann_bantiling sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Some think that these environmental problems are too big for individuals to be solved, while others think that individuals cannot solve these environmental problems unless governments make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion. wad al khalifa sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Anish Joseph sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Some people believe that a vertical city in which people work and live in tall buildings is a good idea. Others say that horizontal living is better. Discuss both views and express your opinion. indermann91@yma... sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Some think that these environmental problems are too big for individuals to be solved, while others think that individuals cannot solve these environmental problems unless governments make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Amarjeet saggu sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Some people think men and women have different natural abilities that make them suitable for different types of work. Others, however, believe that both men and women can be equally suited to do any type of work. Discuss both views and give your own opini wad al khalifa sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? bwosti sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
In some countries, government safety laws include things such as wearing a hard hat on a building site or wearing safety clothes in certain factories.To what extent are laws of this kind a good idea? What sort of safety law would you introduce? bwosti IELTS Writing Task II
You would like to find a new place to live.Write a letter to the local estate agency. In your letter- explain why you would like to move- say what type of house you would like- ask about the options you haveDear Sir or Madam, Darby IELTS Writing Task I
essayE-rater's picture

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 10
No. of Words: 181 200
No. of Characters: 725 1000
No. of Different Words: 117 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.668 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.006 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.001 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 40 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 31 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 12 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 3 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 10.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.455 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.235 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.597 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.205 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4