Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time,write a letter to the hospital. In your letter.> explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the

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Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time,

write a letter to the hospital. In your letter.
> explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital
> say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do
> give details of when you would be available for this work

Dear Sir,

I am Imali Chathurika who is living in Kottawa. And I am working as a primary school teacher. I saw the advertisement in the newspaper asking the help from the people to do work for free of charge at the hospital.

It was really happy to see that advertisement in the newspaper since I was looking for a charity work. Furthermore I like to do something for the society and my parents also will proud about me.

As I am a teacher I am good with the children therefore I would like to work in children word and I can do some arrangements to clean the word and make happy the children in the word. But I am little afraid with the blood.

I am available on every weekend from 8a.m. - 2p.m. If you want my help I am always ready to support from my best. It would be grateful you can reply me before end of this month.

Thanks,
You’re faithful
(K.D.I.C. Udayangani)

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my parents also will proud about me.
my parents also will be proud about me.

make happy the children
make the children happy

before end of this month.
before the end of this month.

flaws:
More sentences varieties wanted. Look, a lot of sentences start with subject 'I'.

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 169 200
No. of Characters: 683 1000
No. of Different Words: 100 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.606 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.041 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.505 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 39 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 28 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 17 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 11 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.623 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.455 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.741 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.165 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 4