The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart depicts the proportion of various age group Australian men and women who engaged in physical exercises regularly in 2010
Overall, the majority of males, particularly teenagers do more exercise, whereas the number of females, mainly those who aged 45 to 54 engaged in physical activities more compared to teenage females.
As we can see, mainly males who aged 15 to 24 do more physical activities that account for 52.8%, but, till 35 to 44, proportion of this activism declined significantly(39.5%). However, beginning from males aged 45 to 54, till senior males aged 65 and over, the percentage of this activism went up to 46.7%
With regard to females' proportion, the most active females were 45 to 54 which corresponds 53.3%. Moreover, young women were less active compared to men aged 15 to 24. Likewise, it is worth to mention that the number of male and female who are 65 years old and over was neaerly the same with 46.7% and 47.1% respectively.

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Average: 7.4 (198 votes)

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...proportion, the most active females were 45 to 54 which corresponds 53.3%. Moreo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, likewise, moreover, whereas, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 803.0 965.302439024 83% => OK
No of words: 165.0 196.424390244 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86666666667 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80394579644 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612121212121 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 244.8 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.4926829268 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.1666603655 43.030603864 205% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 160.6 112.824112599 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0 22.9334400587 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2 5.23603664747 233% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312863420446 0.215688989381 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157173945967 0.103423049105 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105349181893 0.0843802449381 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21879456359 0.15604864568 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.166018780891 0.0819641961636 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.2329268293 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 61.2550243902 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.3012195122 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.9970731707 138% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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The vertical bar graph depicts the information about the males and females. Who engaged in physical activities in Australia.

At a fleeting glance, it is lucid that the proportion of boys and girls aged 15 to 24 were 52.8% and 47.7% respectively. Whereas, the highest number of feminine did physical activities who were under 45 to 54 that was 53.3%. While in the same age group between 35 to 44 ratio of males were less as compared to females.

Moving ahead, almost 8% difference of both genders who did physical exercise in age between 55 to64. Thereafter,who aged 65and over there percentile were approximately similar between men and women towards physical exercise in 2010. While the proportion of males were only 42.2% who aged 25 to34.

Overall, the percentage of women who dis regular exercise is maximum as compared to men in five age groups.