The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

The below graph illustrates the rate of retired people, who will have been living between 1940 to 2014, in Japan, Sweden, USA.
Overall, fraction of older people, who lived in Japan, Sweden and USA, will have been inclined over the 100 years but surprisingly, trend will be inverted at end of 2040.
In 1940, rate of retired USA citizen was highest with 9%. This was slightly higher than Sweden and Japan, which were lived 7% and 5% respectively. Fraction was slightly decreased over the 1980 to 1995, after gradually increased by 40 years of period, before will have been steadied over next 20 years from 2000. Fraction will be sharped increased from 2020 to 2040 to finished at 24 percent.
On the other side, rate of Sweden citizen followed USA trend by difference of 2% until it overtook the proportion of USA in 1997. Although, rate will be slightly declined in 2025 before it will be at peak point(25%). Proportion of aged Japanese will have been rocked over 100 years (over 25%). except, decreased between 1940 to 1960.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...overtook the proportion of USA in 1997. Although, rate will be slightly declined in 2025...
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...ve been rocked over 100 years over 25%. except, decreased between 1940 to 1960.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 848.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 178.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76404494382 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38093572836 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556179775281 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 239.4 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.114634146341 1745% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.940433951 43.030603864 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.8 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.7 5.23603664747 13% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109936920059 0.215688989381 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551629806177 0.103423049105 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428783131755 0.0843802449381 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0809674262061 0.15604864568 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349826696598 0.0819641961636 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.2329268293 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 61.2550243902 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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