The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the republic of Freedonia Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown

The provided line graphs compare the number of male and female workers in 6 broad job sectors of Freedonia. As is presented in the two line graphs, women have made a significant improvement in Freedonian job sectors over the 20 years.

Initially, in 1975, men were ahead in all job sectors than women. In manufacturing job fields, around 220 women were employed while the number of male employees was well over 600 per thousand. Men were ahead of women in terms of their involvement in jobs in all of the mentioned 6 broad sectors. In Finance/ Banking, wholesale & retail trade, non-defense public sector, women were far more behind than their male counterpart. Only in communications sector women were close to men. Among 1000 employees in defence public sector women were less than 50 where men were around 250. The first graph thus depicts the men and women workforce in Freedonia in 1975.

But after 20 years in 1995, the scenario had changed significantly. Women crossed men in terms of their job involvement in communication and wholesale & retail trade. In defence, the number of women workers doubled that the number of 1975, whereas the number of men had decreased to 200. In non-defence sector, the differences had not changed that much but in communications and Finance/ Banking sector women have done significant improvement compared to their number 20 years back.

In summary, women in Freedonia had done a remarkable progress in job sectors and in some cases had superseded their male counterparts.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...n terms of their involvement in jobs in all of the mentioned 6 broad sectors. In Finance/ ...
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...d women workforce in Freedonia in 1975. But after 20 years in 1995, the scenario...
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...compared to their number 20 years back. In summary, women in Freedonia had done ...
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...red to their number 20 years back. In summary, women in Freedonia had done a ...
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...In summary, women in Freedonia had done a remarkable progress in job sectors and in some cases had su...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, thus, well, whereas, while, in summary, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1269.0 965.302439024 131% => OK
No of words: 251.0 196.424390244 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05577689243 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81845066876 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 106.607317073 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490039840637 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 378.9 283.868780488 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7580558861 43.030603864 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6428571429 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9285714286 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21428571429 5.23603664747 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160240277494 0.215688989381 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754584428147 0.103423049105 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704182657354 0.0843802449381 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117476579344 0.15604864568 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365381643333 0.0819641961636 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 61.2550243902 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 40.7170731707 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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