You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.Write a letter to this friend. In your lettergive details of your study plansexplain why you

Essay topics:

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

give details of your study plans
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Julie,

Good day! How are you? Hope that you are fine. By the way this is Maria Judith Parayno, your friend from Antipolo City, Philippines. It is been a long time since we met each other. Actually, I wrote this letter because I am going to Canada to study and live there for good and I really need your help for me to support my studies.

Like what I said earlier, I will go there in Canada to continue my education and also to live there since my sister is also live there. Also, while I am studying I want and need to have a part time job for me support my studies also not be added as a burden to my sister. My flight will be on April 23rd of 2017, and the starting of class in Toronto University will be on May 2nd of 2017. My schedule of class starts at 9 o'clock in the morning until 5 o'clock in the late afternoon, every weekdays only. On my weekends, I am free and be able to work. You mentioned before that your family business, to be specific your convenience store needs to have more employee and I need you to help me how to get atleast a part time job on your family store. I can apply as a cashier every Saturday an Sunday because that is my free time and I have a background job as a cashier here in the Philippines.

Hoping that you can help me. Thank you and always take care. See you soon!

Sincerely yours,

Maria

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...I am studying I want and need to have a part time job for me support my studies also not ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 423, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: o'clock
... 2017. My schedule of class starts at 9 oclock in the morning until 5 oclock in the la...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 453, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: o'clock
...arts at 9 oclock in the morning until 5 oclock in the late afternoon, every weekdays o...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 712, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...eed you to help me how to get atleast a part time job on your family store. I can apply a...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 788, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...I can apply as a cashier every Saturday an Sunday because that is my free time and...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, may, really, so, while, by the way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 32.9175257732 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1089.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 264.0 206.0 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.125 4.54256449028 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 3.78020617076 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.21937051586 2.54303337028 87% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 127.690721649 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541666666667 0.622605031667 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 351.0 290.88556701 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.360824742268 277% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9071629955 44.8134815571 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.6 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 4.34317383033 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308231121522 0.216113520407 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112381436914 0.0766984524023 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0864035593684 0.0603063233224 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261655445482 0.12726935374 206% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658805018337 0.0580467560999 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.8 8.37731958763 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 70.7449484536 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.38 8.71597938144 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.69 7.59969072165 88% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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