You are a student who wants to apply to green pines college. you are experiencing financial problems at the moment.Write a letter to the principal of the college explaining your situation and ask for information on scholarships or other means of financial

Essay topics:

You are a student who wants to apply to green pines college. you are experiencing financial problems at the moment.
Write a letter to the principal of the college explaining your situation and ask for information on scholarships or other means of financial help available.

I am writing this letter to know more information on the grants and concession available toward undergraduate fee for international student at Green Pines College. First of all, I am a sophomore student and I would like to apply for a undergraduate degree at green pines but because of financial crisis I am unable to do so as of now. 

Secondly, I would really appreciate if you can take time out of your busy schedule and share the valuable information on types of scholarships available at university and how to acquire funds from other different sources as well because it would allow me to go ahead with my application at Green Pines College.  

Finally, I would be glad if you can either drop me an email with a compiled list of scholarships being offered at the university or international scholarships for students throughout the United States of America. 

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. 

Yours Faithfully 
FaizalReza 
 

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
...e student and I would like to apply for a undergraduate degree at green pines but...
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...l crisis I am unable to do so as of now.  Secondly, I would really appreciate if y...
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...h my application at Green Pines College.   Finally, I would be glad if you can eith...
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...throughout the United States of America.  I am looking forward to hearing from you...
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...ooking forward to hearing from you soon.  Yours Faithfully  FaizalReza   
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...ring from you soon.  Yours Faithfully  FaizalReza   
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... soon.  Yours Faithfully  FaizalReza   
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, well, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 32.9175257732 52% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 818.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 157.0 206.0 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2101910828 4.54256449028 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.50788335737 2.54303337028 138% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 127.690721649 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.662420382166 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 2.0 12.6804123711 16% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 78.0 16.3608247423 477% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 317.5 44.8134815571 708% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 409.0 76.5299724578 534% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 78.5 16.8248392259 467% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 39.5 4.34317383033 909% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297564837787 0.216113520407 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.227366886267 0.0766984524023 296% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364928201364 0.0603063233224 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151883532108 0.12726935374 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586874545029 0.0580467560999 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 42.4 8.37731958763 506% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -7.69 70.7449484536 -11% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 3.82989690722 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 33.7 7.45979381443 452% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.12 8.71597938144 162% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.13 7.59969072165 146% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 8.62886597938 348% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 33.2 8.54432989691 389% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 34.0 8.15463917526 417% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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