You recently visited a store to repair your computer, but they couldn’t fix it. Write a letter to the store manager and say– What was the problem with your computer?– What happened in the store?– What do you want them to do about it?

Essay topics:

You recently visited a store to repair your computer, but they couldn’t fix it. Write a letter to the store manager and say

– What was the problem with your computer?
– What happened in the store?
– What do you want them to do about it?

Dear ABC

I am writing this letter with reference to my computer(Dell-995) which I purchased a month ago from your store.

Everything was perfect, I get used to with the system and one day I got an update, once I installed the update it starts making a weird noise and shut down automatically, and after that, it would not start.

I take that system at your store, and the action of your staff on 25 April upset me greatly. As he straight away denies to repair it even though it is under the warranty instead, he advised me to buy a new product by paying extra money for that product.

Since actions speak louder than words, I would like you to get my system repaired as early as possible, because my work gets stuck of this. If you require any further assistance please don not hesitate to call me at 999954661. Thanking you in advance for your help and understanding and I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Sincerely
XYZ

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 141, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, with reference to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 773.0 937.175257732 82% => OK
No of words: 171.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52046783626 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57376386955 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.707602339181 0.622605031667 114% => OK
syllable_count: 232.2 290.88556701 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.2840266872 44.8134815571 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.428571429 76.5299724578 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4285714286 16.8248392259 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 4.34317383033 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175275341451 0.216113520407 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700764528976 0.0766984524023 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592734938303 0.0603063233224 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101215001277 0.12726935374 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499418077239 0.0580467560999 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 8.37731958763 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 41.2886597938 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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