The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease the violent crimes in society To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order
to decrease the violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

it is irrefutable that the films and TV programmes today are filled with violence and as a
result violence is increasing in our societies. I agree that censoring such programmes and
films, some amount of violence can be decreased. In the following paragraphs, I shall put
forth my arguments to support my views.

Reducing the amount of violence on TV and in the cinema would certainly be a good start to
decrease violence among people. It is a well known fact that the media possesses a lot of
power to influence people. So, those in the media must be judicious about delivering news
in a balanced manner that brings the story to the consumer without showing too much
violence. Journalism is a profession like any other and certain standards of quality and
professionalism need to be maintained.

There are many harmful effects of such programmes on the individuals and society. The
most disturbing effect is on the children and youth. Media violence can stimulate fear in
some children as it frightens them, making the effects long lasting. This can become
traumatic in our children as they see it more and more. Children are starting to grow and
are shaping their personality, values and beliefs. They can become aggressive or they can
lose a sense of reality and fiction of what they are seeing.

Moreover, young people imitate what they see and it is logical that they see glamour in
what they do when they commit violence. Consequently, the society suffers as the streets
are full of violence. Finally, too much portrayal of these also leads to immunity among the
people and they are not affected by the disasters any more. Disasters like Tsunami and
earthquakes don’t make people shed a tear any more.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, having a check on the violence in TV
programmes and films, would certainly be a good start to decrease the violence and crime
in society.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
it is irrefutable that the films and TV pr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, moreover, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92097264438 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70682303066 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504559270517 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1424627858 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9444444444 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2777777778 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.61111111111 7.06120827912 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.38176352705 525% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126236781089 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0362495020804 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483665357574 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0354934280528 0.151304729494 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424167875442 0.056905535591 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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