Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle Both schools and parents are responsible for this problem To what extent do you agree with this problem

Essay topics:

Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for this problem.

To what extent do you agree with this problem

Nowadays, there is a variety of lifestyle having become more popular and they can be considered to have both advantages and disadvantages in term of nutrition/health. As a result, the children is also influenced by those and not everyone makes the same deal with when they face to problem.

With regard to lifestyle, we can see this including a number of opinion about/relating to political, religious, heathy problems. Living healthily help people to succeed in their work as well as their life. However, at the moment, there are many children having a unhealthy lifestyle. They spend all day to stuck with smartphone, game online, stay up and wake up lately likewise even some of them used drug or get involved with mules.

The first responsibility is argued to belong to family. After that, this rest on the shoulders of school and society. Parents should look after their children, which make sure the students won’t approach/interact with too much resources containing toxic factors. School and Society must responsible for education and make healthy environment for individuals to can develop. At the same time, the system of rules must be complemented and completed to discourage and completely deal with illegal activities.

In conclusion, there are many solutions having been performed. However, this problem is still complicated; therefore three factor comprising of family, school and society need to be made a tight link and solved together

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...owadays, there is a variety of lifestyle having become more popular and they can ...
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Suggestion: an
... moment, there are many children having a unhealthy lifestyle. They spend all day...
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Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...udents won’t approach/interact with too much resources containing toxic factors. Sch...
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Message: Did you mean 'comprising' or 'consisting of'?
Suggestion: comprising; consisting of
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, likewise, look, so, still, therefore, well, even so, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1241.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 233.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32618025751 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02456677885 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.665236051502 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 384.3 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2886885208 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4615384615 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9230769231 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2307692308 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28880989972 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856780529587 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440600656695 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151809832979 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00957774242249 0.056905535591 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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